Dargquon Ql'deleodna

Freaking Amazing Mate. -DQ

BWAHAHAHAHAHAaaa.... I will find you SPEW!!! Nice, I liked the random gandalf entrance, made my day so much more enjoyable. Then you had arsum come in, ahh the insanity! Congrats ...

Better, lets see some more.

Thanks, for the critiques. I haven't had a chance to spend some quality time and edit the whole thing just yet. I haven't even touched the beginning, but now that ...

I decided to continue it. The story jumps around a bit. "A few words on Mark's behalf William?" said the priest, snapping William back into the dull gray reality. The ...

Nice Dan, very nice. Cool concept, and how everything seemed to mesh.

Nice, funny and with action. Sweet job, with everything so far.

possibly, but some of the sequels rocked, such as ender's shadow, shadow of the hegemon, and shadow puppets.

*sigh* such a waste of a post but what ever.... simply put I Hate You not simply put you can't portray me at all, thats not how i act, i ...

Don't read this book, although it is interesting how george orwell connected the important people of the russian revolution to animals, it is over all a terrible book. We were ...

SPEW DOESN'T EXIST?!?!?!? :cry: Alas!! as i am mention i seem like buddy (is that his name?, i can never remember insignificant people like him) from the Incredibles, i am ...

that was awsome, a little more description on what the girl was would be nice, it was also a little too short for my liking; it could have been turned ...

both part 1 and part 2 were good. it would be easier to read if it wasn't just one collective paragraph, but a bucnh of smaller ones.

dude, this get better and better, keep it going. it really really is good.

nice little short poem, the first two lines rhymed, but the other two don't rhyme much... but its pretty good, no grammer or spelling mistakes. Clear and concise.